Wednesday, February 8, 2012

A Day At The Beach

My teeth were chattering together as I was walking along the sandy beach, The sun slowly disappeared as clouds gathered together . Sky turned dim . A gush of wind swooped by me,”the element of surprise”, I mumbled. Wrapping a warm blanket around me, I grinned.


2 comments:

  1. Hi Seini-Mino,

    Great work, I really enjoyed reading this piece of writing. My favourite part of this writing is when you said "A gush of wind swooped by me,...". It's really interesting. I could tell by your writing that it was really cold by the way you described it, without saying it was cold. I think if the title of this post was a little different, like: if you didn't use the word 'cold'.

    Your Sincerely,
    Mubasshira

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  2. Hi Mino

    I really enjoyed reading your post about the beach. My favourite part was when you said, a gush of wind swooped by me,”the element of surprise”, I mumbled. Well keep up the fantastic work!

    Your Sincerely Jarna

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